Some T.v is good for you and might help you in life. While you are in school to. In science class we watch videos, and learn about other climates in the world. So it helps you learn about the world right now.
Another reason why T.V is good for you is because their is new's, and new's tells you what is going on in or around the world. It also might tell you something that you did not know already.Some commercials give you information to know around your local area. You can help your self by watching T.V because there might be sales that you did not know already sothat information can save you money to.
These are my four reasons that you should watch T.V, and mainly it helps you in life and it educates you. So you should watch T.V.
BY: Dominic Melchor
Hi Dominic,
ReplyDeleteYou already know a lot of my comments because we read your essay today in class. Here they are again:
1. Your essay definitely has 5 paragraphs - including 1 intro, 3 body, and 1 conclusion paragraph
2. Your opinion that TV is good is clearly stated
3. You have 3 reasons in your intro paragraph about why you think TV is good. These reasons don't really match the body paragraphs in your essay. For example, your intro paragraph says TV helps you reach higher standards, but I don't see anything about what those higher standards are later in your essay.
4. Each of your body paragraphs is about 1 of your reasons for liking TV. Good job.
5. Your conclusion paragraph doesn't really summarize your reasons that you think TV is good. Remember that the conclusion paragraph is your last chance to convince your readers of your opinion. Make sure you explain what your reasons are 1 last time before ending your essay.
Score 17/20